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Il Mago50
01-22-2014, 07:49 PM
http://gambleguru.sportsblog.com/post/552513/nba_fiction_the_day_that.html

Hey everyone, I'm just posting this to see if I could get some feedback on this fiction sports story towards making other ones down the line, would appreciate it!

Tblaze
01-22-2014, 09:14 PM
Seems you went a long way to move that last one-liner :P

It made me smile a bit, I think it could use more build up/introduction